I heard there was a secret note
That William Carlos Williams wrote
But you don't really care for sorries, do you?

It goes like this, they're cold, they're sweet
You saved them for a breakfast treat
But from your fridge, I took the plums and screwed you.

@erinbee as someone with 2 non-plum-related Hallelujah riff posts in their drafts, this is beautiful & I thank you for it

@nashhigh 🙏

I love a good Hallelujah riff

@erinbee it's up there with "Mr. Brightside" for Songs I Just Love to See Riffed
@erinbee wow this is amazing and awful I love it

@aurynn The best type of awful!

(Thanks!)

@erinbee took staring at it for a moment before I realized I needed to read the first part with the tune too
@platypus @erinbee I had to read the thread to get the Hallelujah ref.
@erinbee You win
@andi I hope the prize is more plums!
@erinbee in a really fancy icebox
@erinbee ahhhhh I love seeing respect for the old forms
@erinbee this one’s a home run, nay, a grand slam

@erinbee *very long inhale*

*somehow even longer exhale*

@erinbee 😂😂😂😂😂😂😂
@erinbee plums and screwed youuu
plums and screwed youuu
@erinbee
I just want to tell you this:
That William Carlos Williams riff
was good and made me whisper
Hallelujah
@erinbee hardly knew ya, hardly knew ya
@erinbee The better class of fridge magnet poetry. And I love your server name!
@erinbee This is simply too good. Where does the internet even go from here?
@erinbee stranger sliding in here to adore this.

@erinbee

You took the grapes you took the limes
But you went too far this time
You stole my only brekker
Jolene

You know that this is zero-sum
Yet you went and ate the plums
And left a poem on the fridge
Jolene

Jolene, Jolene, Jolene, Jolene
I'm begging of you please don't be William
Jolene, Jolene, Jolene, Jolene
Please don't take my cold sweet plums

@zigzackly Bravo!
@erinbee A work that would not have existed but for yours.
So, permit me to bow to you first.

@erinbee thanks for getting me to sing today.

(I don't understand any of the references tho)

@Metzgirl A bunch of people are riffing on William Carlos Williams' poem "This is just to say" and I had an earworm

@erinbee

Day-o, day-o
Daylight come and I want a plum
Day, is a day, is a day, is a day, is a day, is a day-o
Daylight come and you wrote that poem

@erinbee were they so ripe and juicy?
@erinbee Synchronicity/coincidence—I just separately referred to the WCW poem here last week (https://mstdn.social/@cordeliane/109340832264899120) and now I see this in my feed! Genius parody.
Auntie Denier (@[email protected])

@[email protected] love this. For some reason it reminds me of “This is Just to Say”. https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/56159/this-is-just-to-say

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@cordeliane Ha, that does scan like WCW!
@erinbee I see what you did there.
@erinbee I just sang that to @Morgan in my most portentous Cohen voice and he told me I was bad and wrong and evil, so thank you <3
@miss_s_b @erinbee I was trying to work out where you were going and then as soon as I heard "they're cold, they're sweet" I groaned.
@erinbee
How I screwed ya...
How I screwed ya...