To give an insight (and sneak-peek) into the types of revisions I make, here is a line from my upcoming book. The first is the original draft, the second is the edit.
Picture it, Anne and Elijah in the Ready Room. Elijah is fighting with the replicator...again.
Original: "You know it can simply make the coffee for you."
Edit: “You do know replicators have this fascinating capability of making a cup of coffee for you.”

