Karen ConlinThe same pronoun appears four times in the sentence I just read. There's no issue with clarity, no missing referent, but my goodness . . . rewording will aid readability, here. I could get that down to one instance of that pronoun without sacrificing the sense.
This is the kind of thing I did NOT include, specifically, in the "state of the project" letter. As usual, it's outside the scope; however, there's no way I can not make a mental note of it. He told me that among the feedback from readers is "there are too many words." Right here, this is what's happening. Too many words.
It's not like "too many notes" in "Amadeus." This can be corrected.