Yasha Hartberg (he/him)Students respond better to feedback when it's depersonalized.
Personal: Your wording here is unclear
Impersonal: The wording here is unclear.
Personal: Your organization is confusing.
Impersonal: The organization is confusing.
Personal: You made the opposite claim in the previous paragraph.
Impersonal: The previous paragraph made the opposite claim.
I've found that this makes a massive difference, giving students the detachment they need to focus on their writing.
David Hooper