@SquidPresident You're right about the ands because I'm having the same issue. They're throwing off the cadence, and I have to figure out how to rearrange them.
The it also stuck out at me, too, so it's good to know that I'm on the right track.
Half the reason I posted this is for somebody else to look at this for clarity sake. (The other was if I was at least doing okay with some of what I've got.)
Thank you.