@aliceamour

Firstly, respect to Adriana. Her verse paints a vivid scene.

Iambic pentameter depends on rhythm. See: https://www.studiobinder.com/blog/what-is-iambic-pentameter-definition-literature/

It is possible to read this with that stress pattern. Though my initial reading did not quite give that naturally, my strong Welsh accent may produce a different pattern to Adriana's natural speech.

The issue, for me, is always whether the rhythm feels awkward when read, regardless of what it is. I usually read my own verse out loud to check.