I've been thinking about what chapter 3 could be about for the past two days.
Knowing Lin Yiyoung's personality, what would *he* want when he got to be "king"?
I also want to keep it in with the explicit consent theme. So what does THAT look like?
I have some good ideas, but now my brain is getting stuck on details. I'm pretty sure her outfit in the episode that chptr 1 was focused on did *not* have buttons. Do I go back and check? How precise should I be about the games/tourneys time-line? 🤔
Aha! It was ep 13 that Yin Guo made the challenge, after her quarter finals win in her first professional match.
I FORGOT that Li Qing Yan called and interrupted their major make-out session.
FTR, her shirt has buttons all the way down both front AND back. Double buttons! 😂
Then we flash to eating leftover pizza: Yin Guo says, "I'm a little tired. I'm going to take a nap." 👀
And Lin Yiyoung goes to drunkenly challenge Li Qing Yan to a game, to mark his territory...
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After he wipes the floor with Li Qing Yan, so drunk he can barely put his pool cue back in the rack, he decides to wander around the city in the middle of the night trying to find Yin Guo a cake, eventually just passing out on the couch, while Yin Guo is still napping from their previous activities.
The next morning, Yin Guo asks:
"Do you remember taking a shower?" He nods.
"Do you remember eating noodles?" "Did I?"
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Yin Guo smiles mischievously.
"Do you ... remember... what we did?"
IS IT STILL FANFIC WHEN ALL THE HORNY TENSION IS RIGHT THERE IN THE SOURCE MATERIAL?!
Poor hungover Lin Yiyoung only just woke up and his hit girlfriend teases him like THAT?!
"Did we ... [horny tension, kissing and hugging on the bed] ... do something?" he asks, completely calling her bluff as she blushes. 😳 "No, no, not really. I was kidding!" 🫣
This whole time-line of going to watch the sunrise on the mountain confuses me. They fly and then drive for hours and hours, see some cool stars, and then return so quickly?
With this AND his flight from Macau to Finland that seems to take just an hour or so according to Yin Guo's practice schedule just is not clear for me.
Gah, I'm getting lost in the detail weeds...
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Anyway, my new theory is that every time Yin Guo is sleepy and needs to take a nap (which is a LOT) is code for recovering from sexy times.
Yet Lin Yiyoung doesn't need to take as many naps... 🤔
All the evidence points to my assumption. 🤭
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@Sanguine_Squid Pro Tip.
Unless it plays a major part in storytelling and doesn't distract from the story itself, gloss over these little things.
I struggle with this too, especially if I'm writing fiction in places that exist in the real world, especially easpecially if I don't know the geography. Like city street names and locations, landmarks that natives of the area take for granted but would immediately would know was out of place if it wasn't mentioned or represented factually.
So I've adopted a, 'if it's not mission critical to the plot in some way, gloss over it and let the reader sort it out,' polocy.
Because remember, whatever pace you set for yourself, whatever tone you establish, you have to stay consistent.
If you put in all the flight details now, you're setting a standard that you'll have to maintain as the story goes on.
Also, remember that what happens onscreen doesn't always translate well to literary practice.
We can jump around the timeline of events all we want on a show because scene transitions and whatnot make it so easy to just...Slip things in, but it doesn't always work well in writing, not unless you set a standard for it in the story, even then you have to remember the consistency rule. :)
Hope this helps.
Sanguine Squid
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