There's a kind of checklist to help with this: when a story is falling short in some way, writers roll out these "rules" for what makes for good and bad prose. There are a bunch of these rulesets (think of #StrunkAndWhite's #ElementsOfStyle), including some genre-specific ones like the #TurkeyCityLexicon:
https://www.sfwa.org/2009/06/18/turkey-city-lexicon-a-primer-for-sf-workshops/
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Turkey City Lexicon - A Primer for SF Workshops - SFWA
Edited by Lewis Shiner Second Edition by Bruce Sterling NOT COPYRIGHTED Introduction by Lewis Shiner This manual is intended to focus on the special needs of the science fiction workshop. Having an accurate and descriptive critical term for a common SF problem makes it easier to recognize and discuss. This guide is intended to save […]
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